Aw, yesssssss- this is awesome, thank you so much! Honestly, if you ever feel like doing DVD commentary for the entirety of this series, I would be here with bells on to devour it- you write with deft nuance, humor, and insight, and you're really good at writing tight 3rd person POV with characterization-appropriate blinders and occasional unreliability, so it's a lot of fun to hear more about the underlying writing mechanics and your own feelings about various characters and their interpersonal dynamics. Also reassuring, as someone trying to get back into writing habits after a long break, that even people whose writing I really like also find wacky tics in their old (and more recent!) writing that they'd like to stop doing.

Anyway, I have to stop here for now and go get started with my workday, but I hope to come back latter. Thanks again! This is really neat, and I'm excited for chapter 17 whenever you get around to it.