[Fic] "The Courting Dance," ch. 5 - Chronicles of Narnia
After eight months of driving myself nuts re: cultural differences, hereditary hatreds, history lessons, sibling relationship, etcetera, I essentially gave up and did a more low-key equivalent of having random ninjas break down the door. In other words, hello there, unplanned plot twist! Thank you for getting me out of the world-building bog. Next up, Bree's POV and, with any luck, actual stuff happening.
Anyway. They have the same blood, same face, same home. So why can't Corin make Cor understand what it means to inherit Archenland? (1,825 words) And yes, this chapter's title was blatantly stolen from the Robert Frost poem.
( Mending Wall )
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Back to The Law That Makes Him King
Forward to You Can Choose Your Friends
Read the final version on ff.net. (Trust me, you want to read the final version. The journal version is a beta draft, with all the boneheaded mistakes that implies.)
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The ending is, obviously, too abrupt. If you have suggestions for smoothing it out, I would love to hear them!
As for the world-building... look, I really wasn't kidding when I said I was having trouble writing a story instead of an abridged dissertation on the history of Archenland. This is as compressed as I could get it and still make the points I think need to be made. If you have any ideas for trimming the exposition, I will love you forever and a day. Seriously.
Anyway. They have the same blood, same face, same home. So why can't Corin make Cor understand what it means to inherit Archenland? (1,825 words) And yes, this chapter's title was blatantly stolen from the Robert Frost poem.
( Mending Wall )---------------------------------------------
Back to The Law That Makes Him King
Forward to You Can Choose Your Friends
Read the final version on ff.net. (Trust me, you want to read the final version. The journal version is a beta draft, with all the boneheaded mistakes that implies.)
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The ending is, obviously, too abrupt. If you have suggestions for smoothing it out, I would love to hear them!
As for the world-building... look, I really wasn't kidding when I said I was having trouble writing a story instead of an abridged dissertation on the history of Archenland. This is as compressed as I could get it and still make the points I think need to be made. If you have any ideas for trimming the exposition, I will love you forever and a day. Seriously.
