ext_9897 ([identity profile] aishuu.livejournal.com) wrote in [personal profile] edenfalling 2010-01-31 02:36 am (UTC)

I think since the characters were left with no questions, the readers didn't see anything to worry about. Susan would be an ideal way to signal that doubt, really, since maybe she doesn't reconcile. Though in all honesty, I think the piece is fine as-is. I merely wanted to offer a bit of concrit since you seemed frustrated...

<3 You know I love your work, right?
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