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Branch ([personal profile] branchandroot) wrote in [personal profile] edenfalling 2011-07-16 03:03 pm (UTC)

It is a little infodumpy, but you need the set-up. Unless you want to go back and show that meeting, and the things Eames notices and teases out, and then condense this scene to "told them what he'd observed". It would be more work, and might wind up more pacing tension as we all wait to find out why this is important.

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