Well, it's Friday, not Thursday, but it's still before the weekend, so I made my ultimate deadline, if not the penultimate one. *sigh* I really must get better about writing to schedule.
Anyway, this is chapter 6 of "Lemonade." Once again, I fail at having them reach water or have sex. The problem, I think, is that my outline basically had one line saying "They reach water the next day," except the characters then started talking and I have trouble cutting off their conversations. And fight scenes keep happening. Go figure.
ETA: Edited 8/27/06 to clarify Duo's motives, insert Xander's name, and make Sasuke's broken English more comprehensible. Thank you to everyone who commented!
( Lemonade, Part VI )
Give me constructive criticism and I will love you forever! The more specific you are, the more I will love you. :-)
Anyway, this is chapter 6 of "Lemonade." Once again, I fail at having them reach water or have sex. The problem, I think, is that my outline basically had one line saying "They reach water the next day," except the characters then started talking and I have trouble cutting off their conversations. And fight scenes keep happening. Go figure.
ETA: Edited 8/27/06 to clarify Duo's motives, insert Xander's name, and make Sasuke's broken English more comprehensible. Thank you to everyone who commented!
Give me constructive criticism and I will love you forever! The more specific you are, the more I will love you. :-)