Nov. 20th, 2006

edenfalling: headshot of a raccoon, looking left (raccoon)
Okay. Two points. First, Faith's outburst is too long and I don't really think she'd say all of that to a relative stranger, but I am too tired and braindead to fix it right now. If you have suggestions, I am all ears. Second... um...

I did have a second point, swear to god, but I seem to have forgotten it. See above re: braindead.

Anyway. Story now, yes?

Lemonade, Part IX )

Oh, hey. I think I remembered my second point. Which is that I know Duo is basically repeating the same thing he told Sasuke back in chapter 1, but that's because it bears repeating. And the third point (neurons are firing, my god, what a peculiar feeling...) is that I also know Faith seems to recover awfully quickly from her little existential crisis, but there is an explanation, so please wait until her POV section in chapter 10 before yelling at me.

Thanks muchly!
edenfalling: headshot of a raccoon, looking left (raccoon)
Okay. Two points. First, Faith's outburst is too long and I don't really think she'd say all of that to a relative stranger, but I am too tired and braindead to fix it right now. If you have suggestions, I am all ears. Second... um...

I did have a second point, swear to god, but I seem to have forgotten it. See above re: braindead.

Anyway. Story now, yes?

Lemonade, Part IX )

Oh, hey. I think I remembered my second point. Which is that I know Duo is basically repeating the same thing he told Sasuke back in chapter 1, but that's because it bears repeating. And the third point (neurons are firing, my god, what a peculiar feeling...) is that I also know Faith seems to recover awfully quickly from her little existential crisis, but there is an explanation, so please wait until her POV section in chapter 10 before yelling at me.

Thanks muchly!

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