I would like to preface this by apologizing for A) writing in second person, B) inflicting this much hideously angsty melodrama upon the world, C) probably not even making any sense in terms of character development, D) creating this kind of horrible melodramatic angst, E) using pretentious section titles, and F) making you read abominable angst and melodrama. Also, I don't think I made any sense whatsoever when trying to talk about gender roles, so I'm sorry for that too.
But I am so sick of this story by now, and it finally has some sort of ending, so I officially give up. If you have any editing advice whatsoever, I will... well. I will owe you a giant favor, okay? Exact payment methods are negotiable.
That said, here is a fic. (The title, of course, is from the nursery rhyme "Mary, Mary, Quite Contrary.")
Mary Pevensie and her family: a character study in three parts. (2,225 words)
[ETA: The AO3 crosspost is now up!]
( How Does Your Garden Grow? )
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...I really kind of hate this fic, but I don't know how to fix it. Please help?
But I am so sick of this story by now, and it finally has some sort of ending, so I officially give up. If you have any editing advice whatsoever, I will... well. I will owe you a giant favor, okay? Exact payment methods are negotiable.
That said, here is a fic. (The title, of course, is from the nursery rhyme "Mary, Mary, Quite Contrary.")
Mary Pevensie and her family: a character study in three parts. (2,225 words)
[ETA: The AO3 crosspost is now up!]
( How Does Your Garden Grow? )
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...I really kind of hate this fic, but I don't know how to fix it. Please help?