Bree chapter, yay! Bree is such a wonderful blowhard. *pets him* I do feel I lost his narrative voice a bit toward the end of the chapter, and the conclusion is too abrupt in general. If you have suggestions on how to fix either of those problems, I will be very grateful.
Cor is Bree's boy and has been since Bree stole him from Calormen. Of course Bree will help him run away again. (1,675 words)
( You Can Choose Your Friends )
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Back to Mending Wall
Forward to The Beating of Our Hearts
Read the final version on ff.net. (Trust me, you want to read the final version. The journal version is a beta draft, with all the boneheaded mistakes that implies.)
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The next chapter will be in Aravis's POV again and should, with any luck, continue the theme of things actually happening. *crosses fingers*
Cor is Bree's boy and has been since Bree stole him from Calormen. Of course Bree will help him run away again. (1,675 words)
( You Can Choose Your Friends )
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Back to Mending Wall
Forward to The Beating of Our Hearts
Read the final version on ff.net. (Trust me, you want to read the final version. The journal version is a beta draft, with all the boneheaded mistakes that implies.)
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The next chapter will be in Aravis's POV again and should, with any luck, continue the theme of things actually happening. *crosses fingers*