Aug. 17th, 2011

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Bree chapter, yay! Bree is such a wonderful blowhard. *pets him* I do feel I lost his narrative voice a bit toward the end of the chapter, and the conclusion is too abrupt in general. If you have suggestions on how to fix either of those problems, I will be very grateful.

Cor is Bree's boy and has been since Bree stole him from Calormen. Of course Bree will help him run away again. (1,675 words)

You Can Choose Your Friends )

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Forward to The Beating of Our Hearts

Read the final version on ff.net. (Trust me, you want to read the final version. The journal version is a beta draft, with all the boneheaded mistakes that implies.)

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The next chapter will be in Aravis's POV again and should, with any luck, continue the theme of things actually happening. *crosses fingers*

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