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wherein Liz continues her edits
Dec. 17th, 2015 10:50 pmI am continuing to edit my way through "The Guardian in Spite of Herself," and am posting one chapter a day over on AO3 until I catch up to myself. So that version is now complete through ch. 11, and I am in the process of overhauling ch. 13.
Ah, ch. 13.
I confess, there is a brief moment in ch. 13 that is the main reason I wanted to do an overhaul in the first place, because I got an ff.net review pointing out the problem with that moment back in March 2014, whereupon I looked at the paragraph in question and said, "Oh shit, you're right. What the actual fuck was I thinking?" Then I figured as long as that needed fixing, I might as well fix some other things that had been bugging me slightly (aka, all the punctuation), and then I figured I might as well roll all that into a 'rework the whole story en route to finishing the next chapter' project, and you can see how quickly THAT happened. *sigh*
There have been a few other lines and paragraphs that I looked at seriously askance upon rereading, which I have duly altered or removed altogether, but this one is the biggie. And I'm not quite sure what to replace it with. I can't simply yank it out and be done, because there's a narrative and character beat that has to hit at that point. But it cannot be that particular beat, because ugh, no.
Seriously, what the fuck was I thinking? Or actually, was I thinking at all? I suspect I wasn't especially, and that's what caused the problem.
It's creepy how cultural conditioning seeps into people's subconscious minds and then seeps back out into our own stories when we're not paying attention, you know?
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ETA: It looked much more solvable in the morning, as such things often do. :-)
Ah, ch. 13.
I confess, there is a brief moment in ch. 13 that is the main reason I wanted to do an overhaul in the first place, because I got an ff.net review pointing out the problem with that moment back in March 2014, whereupon I looked at the paragraph in question and said, "Oh shit, you're right. What the actual fuck was I thinking?" Then I figured as long as that needed fixing, I might as well fix some other things that had been bugging me slightly (aka, all the punctuation), and then I figured I might as well roll all that into a 'rework the whole story en route to finishing the next chapter' project, and you can see how quickly THAT happened. *sigh*
There have been a few other lines and paragraphs that I looked at seriously askance upon rereading, which I have duly altered or removed altogether, but this one is the biggie. And I'm not quite sure what to replace it with. I can't simply yank it out and be done, because there's a narrative and character beat that has to hit at that point. But it cannot be that particular beat, because ugh, no.
Seriously, what the fuck was I thinking? Or actually, was I thinking at all? I suspect I wasn't especially, and that's what caused the problem.
It's creepy how cultural conditioning seeps into people's subconscious minds and then seeps back out into our own stories when we're not paying attention, you know?
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ETA: It looked much more solvable in the morning, as such things often do. :-)
