Mmm. I still want to see if I can get some of the information in earlier -- like maybe have Eames and Sally talk about it when they bring up Robert, or have Eames think about Robert's daddy issues while Robert's showing him where the staircase ran off to -- but I'm glad this version is at least functional. :-D For a while there the heart of this section was ten giant paragraphs of Eames Explains It All, with no response from Arthur or Dom and no pauses for narration to show what Eames thought about the stuff he was saying. And that, clearly, would not have worked!
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Date: 2011-07-17 03:12 am (UTC)