if you hadn't said there were gaps in the writing I wouldn't have noticed. XD The ending works fine.
I really liked Sara's dilemma here, and wow, Setsuna being all wise! How weird. XD But what I really really liked were the background details of changing technology and music fads, oh *fashion.* That really does make it seem like the fic is happening in our close future, especially since it seems so normal to them.
"You realize that you're implying heaven and hell are run by idiot teenagers," Sara said, not bothering to hide her smile. "Idiot teenagers who happen to be millennia old, but basically? Yeah," Setsuna agreed. Mental age stuck to physical age? Makes sense, too, with their behaviors. XD
I really like that they still feel like Setsuna and Sara, and if you didn't mention the swelling joints and silvered hair I'd almost forget to update their appearance in my head. Anyway, full of d'aws.
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Date: 2012-02-09 01:41 am (UTC)I really liked Sara's dilemma here, and wow, Setsuna being all wise! How weird. XD But what I really really liked were the background details of changing technology and music fads, oh *fashion.* That really does make it seem like the fic is happening in our close future, especially since it seems so normal to them.
"You realize that you're implying heaven and hell are run by idiot teenagers," Sara said, not bothering to hide her smile.
"Idiot teenagers who happen to be millennia old, but basically? Yeah," Setsuna agreed.
Mental age stuck to physical age? Makes sense, too, with their behaviors. XD
I really like that they still feel like Setsuna and Sara, and if you didn't mention the swelling joints and silvered hair I'd almost forget to update their appearance in my head. Anyway, full of d'aws.