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edenfallingI went back and gutted extraneous things out of Faith and Duo's POV sections in chapter 5 of "Lemonade" -- my god, I do just ramble on and on and on when I'm not paying attention -- and started Sasuke's. The chapter is now at 2,450 words, and I would very much like to wrap it up in another 500 words... this will probably require a bit more pruning of Faith and Duo's sections to compensate for Sasuke's inevitable brooding.
Again, I fail at sticking to my outline and have inserted a whole chapter wherein people talk and talk and nothing much happens. *headdesk*
I swear, in chapter 6 they will reach water.
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"Finding Marea" is at 12,000 words. I have also edited the early sections to make them fit better with the overall line of the story, which... mutated as I wrote. Harai is now telling Marea's story her way, based on the historical situation of Ochre Varos during Mechved II's rule, and on written records such as census registries, trial reports, and letters from various Church figures.
I need to more firmly establish the exact nature of documentary evidence in this world, and the degree to which people are aware of authorial bias, etc., but this is just so much fun!
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I have today and tomorrow off, yay! Unfortunately, it's about 90 degrees Fahrenheit, humid as fuck-all, and with a 20-40% chance of thunderstorms at any given hour. I have hauled two of my three fans out of storage and set them up, and I expect my electric bills will skyrocket.
Summer. Bah.
You could not pay me enough to move anywhere south of about Philadelphia -- D.C. at the outer limit -- unless it was up in the mountains or out west where it is, at least, a dry heat.
Again, I fail at sticking to my outline and have inserted a whole chapter wherein people talk and talk and nothing much happens. *headdesk*
I swear, in chapter 6 they will reach water.
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"Finding Marea" is at 12,000 words. I have also edited the early sections to make them fit better with the overall line of the story, which... mutated as I wrote. Harai is now telling Marea's story her way, based on the historical situation of Ochre Varos during Mechved II's rule, and on written records such as census registries, trial reports, and letters from various Church figures.
I need to more firmly establish the exact nature of documentary evidence in this world, and the degree to which people are aware of authorial bias, etc., but this is just so much fun!
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I have today and tomorrow off, yay! Unfortunately, it's about 90 degrees Fahrenheit, humid as fuck-all, and with a 20-40% chance of thunderstorms at any given hour. I have hauled two of my three fans out of storage and set them up, and I expect my electric bills will skyrocket.
Summer. Bah.
You could not pay me enough to move anywhere south of about Philadelphia -- D.C. at the outer limit -- unless it was up in the mountains or out west where it is, at least, a dry heat.
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Date: 2006-05-30 06:03 pm (UTC)On the other hand, going to school in Huntington (on the Ohio) and having most of the extended family living in Oklahoma and Texas, I've become well aware that I'm a bit spoiled that way. ^_^
So, yeah. A-bloody-men.
Ja, -n
(And long chapters are a problem why?)
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Date: 2006-05-30 06:11 pm (UTC)1. The average chapter length for "Lemonade," discounting the chapter-in-progress, is around 2,000-2,200 words. A 3,000+ word chapter will make my story look lopsided.
2. The story already suffers from creeping chapter length increases. If this goes on, then when I write a 2,000 word chapter, people will say it's too short. That's irritating.
3. Two chapters in a row of nothing but people talking is getting old. (Okay, so I threw in a smidge of fanservice in this one, but still.)
But mostly it's a balance thing, and I can get weirdly obsessive about stuff like that. It's just the way I am. :-)
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Date: 2006-05-30 07:04 pm (UTC)and trust me, it's 95F here and i'm barely north of Philly (just a more central part of the state) i wouldn't want to be here either! it's damn hot!
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Date: 2006-05-30 07:58 pm (UTC)"Lemonade" is a weird story for me. I'm not always in the mood to write it, but when I am writing it, it's like turning on a faucet -- the words just flow and I'm never quite sure where the water is going. Of course, this means that my rambling tendencies get severely exaccerbated, but still. It's interesting to take a slightly more hands-off attitude toward writing something.
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Date: 2006-05-30 08:14 pm (UTC)(Oh, and personally I quite enjoyed all the exposition in the first chapters, you do it so well that I find it perfectly wonderful to read *grins*)
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Date: 2006-05-30 08:59 pm (UTC)...
I still don't like the expository dialogue, though. It's fun, it's easy, and I like trying to do it in three different narrative voices, but... I do have somewhere I'm trying to go with the story, and after a certain point digressions stop being atmospheric and start getting in the way. And I know that my sense for that line is unreliable, to say the least, so I get irritated when I drift toward it. *sigh*
Ah well. *plots Sasuke!introspection*