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mercverse AU -- but my latest disk has gone kerflooey (this is the THIRD DISK IN TWO WEEKS, DAMNIT) and so I cannot post it today. ARGH.
*beats head on table*
In more cheerful news, chapter 8 of "Guardian" is now at 1,900 words, which means I wrote about 1,250 words last night -- go me! I'm pretty happy with Sasuke and Naruto's opening scene, and I've also finished the scene where the caravan reaches the way station and Yukiko gets Seichi to explain himself. Said explanation is... not exactly what I was expecting -- it altered in the writing, the way these things often do -- but it follows the basic outline of what I'd decided, so it won't affect things too much. In fact, the changes may make various things easier later on.
I will, of course, be editing the scene heavily before posting, because right now it rambles and borders on an info-dump, but I like the way the playing cards keep turning up and working into the conversation. It's as if, in order to read Seichi properly, you have to listen to his words and watch the cards, because the cards are his body language. I like that. Again, it's not quite what I intended when I introduced them, but I think it works out well.
(Seichi was born, in my outline, with little more than a plot function, a physical description, and a habit of fiddling with cards. Sometimes I 'get' characters in a flash of personality. Other times, I have to dig for details, or prod them this way and that way and watch as characterization accretes around them.)
icedark_elf's FF7 mercverse AU -- but my latest disk has gone kerflooey (this is the THIRD DISK IN TWO WEEKS, DAMNIT) and so I cannot post it today. ARGH.*beats head on table*
In more cheerful news, chapter 8 of "Guardian" is now at 1,900 words, which means I wrote about 1,250 words last night -- go me! I'm pretty happy with Sasuke and Naruto's opening scene, and I've also finished the scene where the caravan reaches the way station and Yukiko gets Seichi to explain himself. Said explanation is... not exactly what I was expecting -- it altered in the writing, the way these things often do -- but it follows the basic outline of what I'd decided, so it won't affect things too much. In fact, the changes may make various things easier later on.
I will, of course, be editing the scene heavily before posting, because right now it rambles and borders on an info-dump, but I like the way the playing cards keep turning up and working into the conversation. It's as if, in order to read Seichi properly, you have to listen to his words and watch the cards, because the cards are his body language. I like that. Again, it's not quite what I intended when I introduced them, but I think it works out well.
(Seichi was born, in my outline, with little more than a plot function, a physical description, and a habit of fiddling with cards. Sometimes I 'get' characters in a flash of personality. Other times, I have to dig for details, or prod them this way and that way and watch as characterization accretes around them.)
Your grammar sucks
Date: 2006-09-11 08:58 am (UTC)I've been reading your works and I feel that your grammar is quite poor for someone who writes this much. You need to go back to first grade and learn to put your commas in the right place. I feel awful about telling you this, but I am also a grammar nut, and I feel that I must tell you to stop writing forever, unless you can fix this poor grammar, which is driving me insane!
Thanks,
Pepsi
Re: Your grammar sucks
Date: 2006-09-11 12:08 pm (UTC)Pepsi
Who has no manners and no clue what he's talking about, since he got the very thing he was complaining about wrong at least once even in that short bit of trolling.
Ja, -n
(*who is well aware he has a backlog of comments owed*)
Re: Your grammar sucks
Date: 2006-09-12 05:06 pm (UTC)Re: Your grammar sucks
Date: 2006-09-12 05:04 pm (UTC)Thank you for the laugh!