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This is the sequel to "The Way of the Apartment Manager," which can be found in clean draft here on ff.net, or in rough draft with comments here on my livejournal. It also has fanart, which can be found here.
This is, again, a transitional sort of chapter, in which I continue to build a rather complicated domino structure so I can dramatically knock it down later. *insert maniacal laughter* And Yukiko does not appear at all -- see, all four POV characters really do have (roughly) equal importance. :-)
There are three things I'm particularly concerned about in this chapter:
1. I'm infodumping in Naga's section -- if you can think of a way to smooth the exposition, or tell me which parts I can chop out, please tell me!
2. I'm trying to hook Eiji more tightly into the rest of the story, but I'm afraid he may still be breaking the pacing/tone/flow/whatever. If you have suggestions for smoothing that issue, I'd love to hear them, too!
3. It would be extremely OOC and unnatural for Sasuke not to be screwed up and unstable at this point, but I'm not sure how his thoughts, emotions, and actions are playing out on paper. In other words, how is he coming off to you? I'm inside his head, so I don't have a good perspective on that.
( The Guardian in Spite of Herself, chapter 7 )
In unrelated news, I've been trying to write down some reactions to Angel Sanctuary. So far, I have about 4,000 words, and there's still so much more I want to say and clarify. Eventually, I will be able to distill that back down to something coherent, at which point I promise I will post it.
Right now, I'll just say that despite some conceptual holes you could drive a freaking army convoy through, I am still in love with the series. There are three reasons for this. First, it's pretty. (Yes, I'm shallow.) Second, I love the characters and the emotions. Third, I love the themes. And yes, there are themes. Oh my freaking god, there are themes. And the way those themes play out in the plot and characterization manages to hit a lot of my story-kink buttons. (By story-kink I mean a character type, plot element, or something that just works for a person and draws you in, whether or not it's objectively well-written or suitable to the story as a whole.)
Um. As you can see, I have a problem staying concise when I'm talking about Angel Sanctuary. But I'm working on it!
This is, again, a transitional sort of chapter, in which I continue to build a rather complicated domino structure so I can dramatically knock it down later. *insert maniacal laughter* And Yukiko does not appear at all -- see, all four POV characters really do have (roughly) equal importance. :-)
There are three things I'm particularly concerned about in this chapter:
1. I'm infodumping in Naga's section -- if you can think of a way to smooth the exposition, or tell me which parts I can chop out, please tell me!
2. I'm trying to hook Eiji more tightly into the rest of the story, but I'm afraid he may still be breaking the pacing/tone/flow/whatever. If you have suggestions for smoothing that issue, I'd love to hear them, too!
3. It would be extremely OOC and unnatural for Sasuke not to be screwed up and unstable at this point, but I'm not sure how his thoughts, emotions, and actions are playing out on paper. In other words, how is he coming off to you? I'm inside his head, so I don't have a good perspective on that.
( The Guardian in Spite of Herself, chapter 7 )In unrelated news, I've been trying to write down some reactions to Angel Sanctuary. So far, I have about 4,000 words, and there's still so much more I want to say and clarify. Eventually, I will be able to distill that back down to something coherent, at which point I promise I will post it.
Right now, I'll just say that despite some conceptual holes you could drive a freaking army convoy through, I am still in love with the series. There are three reasons for this. First, it's pretty. (Yes, I'm shallow.) Second, I love the characters and the emotions. Third, I love the themes. And yes, there are themes. Oh my freaking god, there are themes. And the way those themes play out in the plot and characterization manages to hit a lot of my story-kink buttons. (By story-kink I mean a character type, plot element, or something that just works for a person and draws you in, whether or not it's objectively well-written or suitable to the story as a whole.)
Um. As you can see, I have a problem staying concise when I'm talking about Angel Sanctuary. But I'm working on it!
