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Two of my betas were clobbered by life this past week, so I used the one and a half responses and did some fine-tuning of my own. (Thank you for the reactions and for trying, ![[livejournal.com profile]](https://www.dreamwidth.org/img/external/lj-userinfo.gif)
lurker_lost, valles_uf, and baka_mazoku!) But I am still iffy about the ending sections -- seriously, if you are unclear on who is playing what role at any point, tell me -- and I would love any and all constructive feedback. The more detailed you are, the better!
(I would also love squeeing, but I think that goes without saying. *grin*)
So. "Undertow" is a semi-sequel to Tides, which is a Team 7-centric story that departs from manga canon during the rescue Gaara arc. Basically, they catch up to Gaara before Akatsuki get him into the cave and yank out his demon; this means Kakashi does not wind up in the hospital, and he, Naruto, and Sakura then go kidnap Sasuke from Hidden Sound. The events of "Tides" follow, ending with Team 7 working as missing-nin and accepting an assassination contract in River Country. That is all you need to know to make sense of this story.
"Undertow" is the story of the assassination mission, told from a target's POV. It contains cold-blooded, pre-meditated murder for money, the implied past sexual abuse and murder of several young women, familial dysfunction, and coercion into a sexual relationship. (There is, however, no rape within the actual story.)
[The slightly revised final version is now up on ff.net!]
( Undertow )
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In other news, today was the third week of Stories of the Sacred, the RE unit I am teaching this year. I am theoretically part of a five-person team, but one of our members has been completely and utterly AWOL -- our emails to him are not bouncing, but we have yet to get a single response from him -- so we're still in process on hashing out a schedule through New Year's.
Anyway, I taught on the first day (and had to abscond early to get to work), dropped by last week to deliver some supplies and then went to the adult service with the intention of leaving early should it run late (miraculously, it ended on time!), and taught again this week. The first week was orientation, the second week was Ramadan, and this week was Rosh Hashanah and Yom Kippur. I liked the lesson except for one thing: it came with a designated snack, apples dipped in honey, which I was unable to eat because of my allergies. *pout*
So we are still spending the year learning about every religion except our own, but at least this year we are attempting to frame the chalice lighting and opening ritual more explicitly as a UU tradition, and to keep reminding the kids that we learn about other religions because UUs believe in searching for the truth wherever we can, and in trying to understand other people. It's not perfect, but it's a definite improvement in my mind.
lurker_lost, valles_uf, and baka_mazoku!) But I am still iffy about the ending sections -- seriously, if you are unclear on who is playing what role at any point, tell me -- and I would love any and all constructive feedback. The more detailed you are, the better!(I would also love squeeing, but I think that goes without saying. *grin*)
So. "Undertow" is a semi-sequel to Tides, which is a Team 7-centric story that departs from manga canon during the rescue Gaara arc. Basically, they catch up to Gaara before Akatsuki get him into the cave and yank out his demon; this means Kakashi does not wind up in the hospital, and he, Naruto, and Sakura then go kidnap Sasuke from Hidden Sound. The events of "Tides" follow, ending with Team 7 working as missing-nin and accepting an assassination contract in River Country. That is all you need to know to make sense of this story.
"Undertow" is the story of the assassination mission, told from a target's POV. It contains cold-blooded, pre-meditated murder for money, the implied past sexual abuse and murder of several young women, familial dysfunction, and coercion into a sexual relationship. (There is, however, no rape within the actual story.)
[The slightly revised final version is now up on ff.net!]
( Undertow )
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In other news, today was the third week of Stories of the Sacred, the RE unit I am teaching this year. I am theoretically part of a five-person team, but one of our members has been completely and utterly AWOL -- our emails to him are not bouncing, but we have yet to get a single response from him -- so we're still in process on hashing out a schedule through New Year's.
Anyway, I taught on the first day (and had to abscond early to get to work), dropped by last week to deliver some supplies and then went to the adult service with the intention of leaving early should it run late (miraculously, it ended on time!), and taught again this week. The first week was orientation, the second week was Ramadan, and this week was Rosh Hashanah and Yom Kippur. I liked the lesson except for one thing: it came with a designated snack, apples dipped in honey, which I was unable to eat because of my allergies. *pout*
So we are still spending the year learning about every religion except our own, but at least this year we are attempting to frame the chalice lighting and opening ritual more explicitly as a UU tradition, and to keep reminding the kids that we learn about other religions because UUs believe in searching for the truth wherever we can, and in trying to understand other people. It's not perfect, but it's a definite improvement in my mind.
