Remix Redux beta request

What I did tonight: wrote 200 more words of the Hinata fic. Man, this is like pulling teeth. But I will get through it! I want to know how it ends!

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Also, I wrote my remix. Yes, all of it.

In a way, I cheated -- the form of what I wrote is almost a paragraph for paragraph retread of the original (plus some expansion and extrapolation) -- but I needed to keep that aspect the same because of the other thing I changed. You don't get the right funhouse mirror effect without the pattern mimicking. (This is definitely a remix where, while it works in its own right, you really need to read the original to get the full impact.)

Hey, is anyone willing to beta read the remix for me? It's between 1,000 and 3,000 words, in a fandom I have talked about before on my journal but never posted any fics in. I don't think you need much canon knowledge; everything is fairly self-explanatory. Also, the original fic it's based on is under a thousand words, so it shouldn't be too hard to read that in order to tell me if my story works as a remix as well as working in its own right.

Remixes are due Sunday night, so I would like this story back on Saturday evening, if possible.

3 things: why yes, I CAN write myself into depressive spirals; remix progress report; NBB fics, yay!

1. The Hinata prompt!fic for hungrytiger11 is now 4,000 words, WTF. All I promised was a minimum of 100. This is forty times that length and it's still not finished!

Also, I think I am writing myself into a mild blue funk every time I work on it. Seriously, this is the most depressing story I have written in ages. Even including the silly bit where Ino talks about Sai and oral sex. But I have to finish it now. I have reached a point where I need the catharsis for myself, regardless of what effect the story will have on any eventual readers.

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2. I did a few preliminary edits on my remix and then sent it to beta -- thank you very much, significantowl and emmee_kay! I think I will post the beta draft on AO3 tonight, just in case. At least that way nobody will have to pinch hit if catastrophe strikes.

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3. Narnia Big Bang fics have started going up on narniaexchange! Do go read them -- the three that have been posted so far are all excellent, and all very different from each other.